Maps, Directions, and Place Reviews
First Draft Thoughts
Thank you, Jordan, for inviting me to comment on this article, and full marks for taking note of the COI guidelines.
As you have noted, the sources are all listed twice. The correct way is to include them inside <ref>...</ref> tags and then get them placed with the {{reflist}} tag.
To survive as an article, the sources need to establish that the franchise is notable. To quote from that page, "A company, ... is notable if it has been the subject of significant coverage in secondary sources. Such sources must be reliable, and independent of the subject."
Working through your sources:
- 2 could be good; someone has written half a page about your company. The reference could usefully mention that the text is on page 31 of the PDF.
- 7 could be good; someone has thought it worthwhile to interview your CEO
The others cannot establish notability:
- 1, 3, 10, 11, 12, 13 are directory listings. I would guess they aim to list every company regardless of size or significance.
- 4 seems to be the same as 2
- 5 and 9 include Oxi Fresh in quite long lists of "growing franchises"; not so good for establishing notability
- 6 does not count as independent, since it derives from a press release issued by your company
- 8 is your own web site, so is not an independent source.
But I'm not convinced this is enough. To quote WP:ORG again: "The source's audience must also be considered. Evidence of attention by international or national, or at least regional, media is a strong indication of notability. On the other hand, attention solely from local media, or media of limited interest and circulation, is not an indication of notability." And so far I can only see sources in media devoted to franchise operations. Am I correct?
Do you have other independent sources for the company winning "awards"? If so, include them in the article or post them here and I'll bring it to the attention of someone with more experience than me in assessing sources.
Good luck! -- John of Reading (talk) 21:45, 24 May 2010 (UTC)
Arrow Carpet Cleaning Video
Review
Hello. I thought I would provide a second opinion on your new article. John of Reading raised a few excellent points about the citations and references in the article, so I thought I would comment on the layout and design of the article. I think the content needs to be organised a bit more - although there's not a lot to write maybe separating the first paragraph into more of an opening section overviewing the article's contents. I would also suggest that you should maybe try moving certain points into new sections instead of all together in a couple of paragraphs. So, just a couple of points but I hope this helps :) Chevymontecarlo 11:45, 25 May 2010 (UTC)
Second Draft?
I've been working on a second draft of the article that is more organized per Chevymontecarlo and focuses more on the notable features of the company per John of Reading. I'm afraid that in doing so, though, it might sound like advertisement. I have the draft pretty much ready, but should I change the old one despite these concerns? (Jordan.labelle (talk) 17:44, 27 May 2010 (UTC))
Second Draft
I made a second draft of the article. I feel that this one will need more extensive COI removal, and I understand. I wrote it this more "Bold" way because I was trying to make it more clear why it was notable. I did my best to keep the tone neutral while still speaking about why it's a notable company, but once again, I understand if it needs significant revision. If you feel this is inappropriate, please remove the offending sections or revert it to an earlier phase. Also, if it needs more content, do you think a section briefly describing the method of cleaning would be okay? The articles a bit short still, and I thought that might be a good place.
Thanks for any help you can offer. And happy Memorial Day weekend everyone. (Jordan.labelle (talk) 22:57, 28 May 2010 (UTC))
Review of second draft
- I don't think you have to worry about COI. You've been open about it and have requested reviews by uninvolved editors. The text is neutral in tone, and the claims are backed up by references.
- I don't think you should add anything about the cleaning methods; there is an entire article about Carpet cleaning (which I think you shouldn't edit - COI again!)
- I think the next step is to move the article out of "user space" to "article space". There it will attract more attention and the claim to notability will be examined more thoroughly. The result may be that it gets tagged for deletion, sadly, but the claim will be given a fair hearing.
To move the article, click the downward-pointing arrow that sits between the "star" and the "search" box at the top right of the page. Or would you prefer I do this for you? -- John of Reading (talk) 08:04, 29 May 2010 (UTC)
Gulp
Here it goes. I just moved it. Hopefully everything goes well. Thanks for your help John of Reading and Chevymontecarlo. Now we'll see what happens. (Jordan.labelle (talk) 21:39, 1 June 2010 (UTC))
Title
How do you change the title of the article? I meant to have it be the complete name of Oxi Fresh Carpet Cleaning, but when I moved it over I forgot to do that. :S --Preceding unsigned comment added by Jordan.labelle (talk o contribs) 18:19, 4 June 2010 (UTC)
Orphan
Anyone have ideas about articles that could link to here? I've got nothing. Jordan.labelle (talk) 19:41, 22 September 2010 (UTC)
Two things
I added to the list of associations a refrence to the SBA (Small Business Administration) and the inclusion of one of the products in the EPA's Design for the Environment program. I thought these were important enough to be included. Let me know what you think.Jordan.labelle (talk) 19:06, 11 October 2010 (UTC)
Basic Update
I updated the links and awards for 2011 and added another site to the company's box. Let me know what you think and if anyone needs help with their articles. Jordan.labelle (talk) --Preceding undated comment added 15:57, 25 February 2011 (UTC).
Basic Update 2.0
I corrected the links at the bottom of the page - some of them had thing like page number, website name, and retrieval date included in the actual link. I also added a reference to Oxi Fresh ranking in the Inc. 500|5000. I did not include the number, as I thought that might seem like too much. Please let me know if you think this is acceptable and if anyone needs help with their articles. Jordan.labelle (talk) 14:51, 15 September 2011 (UTC)
Basic Update 3.0
I updated the links at the bottom of the page as four of them were out of date. I updated the total number of franchises, clarified an award date, and removed a reference to AllBusiness.com, as the link is now dead - it seems they took down the list we were referencing. Please let me know if you think this edits are acceptable. Jordan.labelle (talk) 18:52, 9 July 2012 (UTC)
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